Sample Papers

Paper #1
"Foreign Athletic Limits"
Grade: D
Explanation:
This paper has many spelling errors and the paper doesn't have a good opening. The paper also doesn't have a conclusion or a paragraph that summarizes what has been said. Overall the paper isn't written very well.

Paper#2
"Online College vs. Online High School"
Grade: C
Explanation:
This paper has spelling errors and it was very hard to read because of the many errors. I could see the point but the way the paper is written threw it off. The essay also has some baby sentences. That is why i would give this reader a C.


Paper#3
"Predisposed to Divorce"
Grade: A
Explanation:
The way the writer starts this essay captures me. The paper has clear sentences so that I can understand her point clearly. This paper doesn't have any grammical errors or mispellings. Thats why I feel that this paper deserves and A.


Paper#4
"NAACP Case Against Gun Manufactures"
Grade:A
Explanation:
The writer used the wrong spellings for some words and had some punctuation errors. The paper was written very well and she stated her point clearly. I understood what the writer was explaining. Overall the paper was very good.

My new post is http://www.mcclatchydc.com/227/story/75694.html

Blog #5 part 2

http://www.thestate.com/crime/story/943159.html

Violence in Columbia blog #5

According to the FBI's annual crime report violence in Columbia decreased. They credit this decrease to the 2007 arrest of over sixty gamg and drug members. The only exception to this report was the increase in violence in Richland county. There burglary and motor vehicle theft.
(FBI Annual Report)

Fallacy: Downy Ultra Scent Longevity

Based on The St. Martin's Handbook about fallacies, I found what I consider one. It is Downy Ultra: Scent longevity commercial. The commercial portrayed that this brand of Downy Ultra scent could last longer than any other brand. In the commercial the man had worn his clothes, and was about to wash his clothes. When this other man strolled over and smelled the man's dirty clothes. He believed that the man had already washed his clothes. In all actuality the scent from the Downy Utra brand would not have lasted after the man had worn his clothes. In reality a stranger would have never came up and smelled another person's dirty clothes. I believe that this commercial is a mixture of a visual fallacy and a logical fallacy. I believe it is a visual fallacy because it is a commercial, and they made it seem as if the Downy Ultra smelled unbelievable. I also believe that the commercial was a logical fallacy because it was common sense. If the gentleman clothes was that awsome than he would have never came to the laundry room to wash his clothes in the first place.

You can find this commercial at
http://adsoftheworld.com/media/tv/pg_downy_ultra_scent_longevity

Myself as a Writer

Writing isn't one of my greatest skills. I'm not terrible at writing but I can improve greatly at many things. In my assignments I put many facts but I include many supporting claims to back up my statements. My true interest is in writing biographies, autobiographies and non-fiction about people and their lives. My writing skills are steadily improving and changing.